i didnt read all but they don't seem bad,..one thing though is stop rhyming all the time! rhyme is not bad but if its repeptitive somehow i feel like its less realistic. like if it were free verse then the poem seems so much more intense and dramatic and impacting and real. but yea theyre not bad.
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i didnt read all but they don't seem bad,..one thing though is stop rhyming all the time! rhyme is not bad but if its repeptitive somehow i feel like its less realistic. like if it were free verse then the poem seems so much more intense and dramatic and impacting and real. but yea theyre not bad.
sorry for being critical...